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Terry Belter

I assume the hit and run is a shooting, but i feel that the word should be added just in case. It also doesn’t roll off the tongue very well to use the multiple commas. You could instead say “teenage boy Ezekiel” to better streamline the phrasing. If you were willing to add a personality trait you could say “Ezekiel the _______ teenage boy”.